第一个故事，艾琳的希望！
一
周围的森林把小村落层层包围，阳光照耀的村落，很美。
一个衣服破旧男孩端着一碗水给他的母亲喝着，妈妈半躺在床上，脸上的细纹和凌乱的头发都没有她眼角的那丝忧伤来的更让人悲伤。
喝完水，妈妈开口说道：“艾琳，爸爸和艾妲回来了吗？”
艾琳扯了扯衣角低下了头，缓缓的说：“没有”。然后艾琳拿着碗走出了破旧的小屋。
妈妈眼中的忧伤不知觉有多了一丝，而艾琳却没有再偷偷的流泪，因为他早已习惯了。
二
艾琳生活的村落是被森林包围的村落，村落中的人们都很善良、勇敢，也很快乐！村落中的人们基本都靠打猎来维持生活，打猎的猎物可以到小镇中去换金币和生活用品。
那是一个花还没有开好的春天，艾琳的妹妹艾妲和爸爸一起出去打猎。之所以会带艾妲去，是因为爸爸答应艾妲在她13岁生日的时候会带她去打猎。
也就是那天是艾妲的生日，一个花还没有开好的夏天。阳光刚刚打照在这个村落的时候，爸爸就和往常一样背起了猎枪，拿好了食物和水，准备去森林的深处。而这次不同的是爸爸是带着艾妲一起去的。
而就是这三个月前的这天，艾妲的13岁生日这天，是艾琳一家最后的一次团聚。
爸爸和艾妲走进了森林深处，永远都没有回来！
（未完待续，童鞋们看看就好，希望不要插楼！）

继续努力！创作的道路很难。坚持就是成功。

喜欢这种感觉

没有了吗？

楼主写的很好呀，
但是，怎么没了呢？

作为一名幼儿艺术创编者的角度，这样的故事是不能算为童话的，因为童话是写给孩子看的，里面不能有这样残忍的情节，而且对孩子来说废话很多，因为他们只注重人物对话部分，描述部分过多会让他们失去兴趣。不过楼主写的还可以啦，可以算作一个感人故事的说

我觉得写得不错，因为是我写的。

楼主。。我把你文章翻译了。。。你看看吧。。
Alan's Hope
There was a village which was surrounded by the forest. The sunshine made the village like a part of heaven. The people in this village were kind, brave and happy! Most of the villagers were hunters by trade. They used the prey to exchanging money and supplies. In a house, a boy with the worn-out clothing was feeding a woman water. The woman was the boy's mother who was lying on the bed with shaggy hair and woeful eyes. When the woman finished drinking, she said:" Alan, have your father and sister been home?" The boy teared his clothing and answered:" NO." Then, he went out of the house with non-recognition of her mother's deeper sad, what he knew was that he should be strong and never cry again.
It was in an early spring without blossom. The day, his father had a gun on his hand and slung a bag with food and water, taking her sister set out to the depths of the forest. But after three months, there's no news about his father and sister. Alan and his mother were very worried, but the only thing they could do was waiting. Without his father and sister, Alan and his mother was difficult in living. And there was no body want to help them. Even there was somebody said that Alan's were cursed by the devil. Alan knew that he should be strong and had the responsibility to feed this family. So he wondered if he could take the old gun that his father left to hunt. But at last, he dropped this idea, because he knew that he was not an experienced hunter, even he couldn't be called as hunter. And who could take care of his mother if he can't come back from the forest? For a long time thinking, the sunset came and made the village in a beautiful color, Alan was siting near the door, his mother was lying on the bed and staring out the door, like she wished for something. The scene was so miserable and dreary. What's the thing that couldn't fade in their mind? And have they known that they have no chance to see their families being together again?
Having eat nothing for two days, Alan's mother was in serious illness. Alan was so worried and even cried. He pushed himself to find a right way to help this family, but he was only a child. He begged from one door to the other and hoped that he could get some food. But no one helped him. Alan couldn't understand why these people changed so much and why the life has been like this. He wanted to cry, but there was no strength for him to waste on crying.
Going back home, Alan poured a cup of water for his mother, but the woman on the bed was keeping her eyes to the outside. It was like passed for a century that the woman shook her head and weakly said:" Alan, have your father and sister been home?" Alan stared his eyes to prevent tear's dropping. " No, they haven't! And they will never be there again", Alan shouted. For a long time, the woman send her trembling hand to stroke the boy's head, said softly:" Alan, your father and sister will be home." The boy nuzzled up to his mother and nodded his head.
The sky was still black, Alan waked up, because he knew that his mother had to eat some food. So he went out of the house. For a long-time walk, the sun rose and everything looked so beautiful and lovely, at least for their appearance. There were so many people walking on the road and doing their own thing. Finally, Allan stopped at a bakery, there were many kinds of bread on the shelf and they smelled so good. " If I can bring this bread for mother", he murmured to himself," but I don't have any money to buy it." He walked away. Sitting under a tree, Alan heard some women talking about the people who were dying from starvation. He was so scared. He was the only person who his mother could rely on, and he needed to do to stop this kind of things to happen. He gnawed his lips, without hesitation, he started walking towards the bakery.


Alan felt like that he was flying in the air. With confusion, he saw a child was chasing by many people, and some of them were shouting:" catching the thief." Soon, the child was caught, and some people said:" kill him, the bad thief!" And suddenly, Alan realized that the bad thief was himself. The little boy lying on the field was surrounded by so many people who only wanted to find some topics. The bakery owner who chased Alan first fulminated:" pal, stand up, if you think lying on the field will solve the problem, you will be wrong!" Then he walked near to Alan and wanted to get his bread which was held tight in Alan's hand back. But he failed, because the boy's fingers were strong like iron. At this time, somebody shouted:" he was dead, he has been killed!" The bakery owner made haste to say:" It was his own fault!"
The sky became darker, but the boy with bread in his hand was still lying on the ground, like he was dreaming of some nice thing and didn't want to wake up. People walked by, and some of them had a quick glance at the boy and quickly gone. Only there were some ants surrounding the boy like they were praying for him.
没分章节的。。因为老师要我们用英文写童话故事，字数限制，修改了蛮多地方。。

第二个故事，利昂的爱情！