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帮我修改一段英语吧。

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不是考试作文哦,是给喜欢的女孩的一段话。
希望能帮忙修改修改。
语病也行,好句子也行,谢谢了。
This time, I didn't feel upset when the reality strongly struck to me. I had already known these things will happen at last. Therefore I'm calm without disappointment, and I think "Anyhow life will go on, whether you are full of sadness or not. So why not face it in peace."I'm glad that you appeared in my life during my best ages, as a bunch of sunshine bursts into the darkness. Both of us will be a better person for now and in the future, I always believe firmly.


IP属地:广东1楼2012-12-11 12:27回复
    This time, I didn't feel upset when the reality struck me. I knew that these things would happen at last. Therefore I was calm without disappointment, and I thought, "Life will go on, whether you are full of sadness or not. So why not face it in peace?". I'm glad that you walked into my life during my best years, such as rays of sunshine streaming through the darkness. Both of us will grow into better persons from now on and into the future. I'll always believe firmly in that.
    修改了一些觉得不通顺的地方、希望能帮到忙。


    3楼2012-12-11 12:37
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      Both of us will be a better person---->both of us will be better persons
      还有,从英文思维来讲,这种表达有点怪


      来自iPhone客户端4楼2012-12-11 12:44
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        At this moment, I don't feel painful when the reality strongly strikes back to me. I already know the things that will happen in the end. So I'm calm and without disappointment. I think that life will go on, whether you are full of sadness or not. So why not face the destiny in peace. I'm glad that you walked into my life during my best ages, as a bunch of sunshine bursts into the darkness. Both of us will be better for now and the future. I am firmly convinced that as always.


        来自iPhone客户端5楼2012-12-11 13:07
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          别发了,我劝楼主,女孩看了不会感动,你知道吗


          来自iPhone客户端6楼2012-12-11 13:08
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