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就是这段,比如那个compensatory我感觉好像有点怪,,,还有语法大家也帮我一下吧
The summer of jun 21th 2012, my alarm clock woke me up at half five, i tiredly jumped out of bed to find my brand new t-shirt from few days ago, i then put the sheets and pillows into cabinet with a bag of mothballs to prevent dust and ant. Because, today, I am boarding a plain back to china for my 5 year compensatory and I think it will be a lovely, boiling and blazing summery trip.


1楼2013-02-13 06:43回复
    On June 21, 2012, during the summer, my alarm clock woke me up at half past five. I tiredly struggled out of bed to get my brand new t-shirt purchased a few days ago. I then put the sheets and pillows into the cabinet with a bag of mothballs to prevent dust and ants. Reason-wise, I was going to take a plane back to China 【for my 5 year compensatory】 and I believed it would be a lovely but blazing summery trip.
    【 】 里是想说啥?


    2楼2013-02-13 10:36
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      thank you


      5楼2013-02-14 00:02
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        On June 21, 2012, during the summer, my alarm clock woke me up at half past five. I tiredly struggled out of bed to get my brand new t-shirt purchased a few days ago. I then put the sheets and pillows into the cabinet with a bag of mothballs to prevent dust and ants. Reason-wise, I was going to take a airplane back to China and I believed it would be a lovely but blazing summery trip.
        After a few minute of cleaning. I went downstairs to see is my dad ready, however, when I open the door I can’t believe my eye that he still sleeping in his soft,springy bed, and that! is what make me indignant, because there is only two hour left to boarding, and we still got lot of thing to pack up,
        “Wake up!“I shouted thundery into my dad ear. How could a man like him so forgetfulness about the thing he just said last night.
        “Not now, Jack, gave me three more minute,”he replied drowsily. But, of course, I would not let him doing that, since every time he got late on the work.so, I itch my dad every three second and very obvious he gave up.
        After we tidy the luggage and finish our breakfast, my dad order me to to ring up the taxi and we starting to go to Airport. Today’s weather is not that good at all, cloudy, raining and strong wind, however, it can’t coverage my happiness to see my parent on other side the earth.
        Suddenly,when we turn around the corner, I saw the worst thing in my lift - traffic jam. So, I ask my dad for opinion, he say we should get on the metro, therefore we leave the taxi and walk 10 minute to the metro station, Finally, we arrive thirty minuet before the airplane takes off at seven a.m.
        The bad thing about the airplane is the diet,I very want to say it’s not suitable for me,however, on other hand I like the way of the sever, yes! I am talking about the stewardess, they just very kind and friendly.
        After twelve hour of flying, me and my dad feel very exhausted, because we only have few hour of sleep,and perhaps I got airsickness, because I feel nausea and vomit.But,whatever, we are arrive, when I know my grandma and uncle is waiting outside i just feel exciting and can’t wait to gave them a big hug and in the same way i think they want to do that too.
        However, when I saw them, i purpose to have so much thing to said but only five words escaped from my lips,”i miss your so much!”
        Finally, this month i have verified that this summer just like in the boiler, but, i also go to lots of place to take photograph and taste different food too. Now I wandering is the mates in Newcastle miss me or not, well, i am going to found out tomorrow. When i deplaning.


        6楼2013-02-14 07:16
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          After a few minutes of cleaning, I went downstairs to see if my dad was ready. However, when I opened the door I couldn't believe my eyes as he wasstill sleeping on his soft, springy bed! That drove me nuts because there was only two hours left to boarding, and we still had a lot of packing to do.
          "Wake up!" my thunderous voice struck my dad's ears. How could a man like him be so forgetful about things he said just the night before.
          “Hmm... Just three more minutes,”he replied drowsily. But of course I would not tolerate that since frequently he was late for work thanks to this. I itched my dad until he gave up eventually.
          After packing the luggage and having our breakfast, we called a taxi and made our way to the airport. That was a rather gloomy day, cloudy and rainy with strong wind. However, it didn't cool off my excitement for a single bit for I'd soon see my family on the other side of the earth.
          Suddenly when turning around the corner, I saw the worst thing in my life - traffic jam. I turned to my dad for his opinion, and he suggested we should take the metro. We thereby alighted from the taxi and walked for 10 minute to the metro station. Eventually we were lucky enough to arrive thirty minutes before taking off at 7 a.m.
          A bad part of the air trip was the meal. I just want to say it wasn't at all my cup of tea. However, on other hand, I liked the service. Yes, I am referring to the stewardesses! They had been very kind and friendly to us.
          After twelve hours of flying, both of us were exhausted as we had only a few hours of sleep, plus perhaps I got airsickness - I experienced nausea and felt like vomiting. Nonetheless, we arrived. Knowing my grandma and uncle were waiting outside, I was overjoyed and couldn’t wait to gave them big hugs. I supposed they felt the same way, too.
          However, when I finally saw them, all but five words slipped through my lips: "I miss you so much!”
          That month was scorching as expected, but I visited lots of places, took photographs, and tasted different food. I wondered if mates in Newcastle were missing me. Well, I would find that out the day after as I'd be returning to Newcastle.


          7楼2013-02-14 09:08
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