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问题:A large number of measures to improve the security in urban areas have been introduced to solve the problem of increased crimes in society.Do the benefits of the measures outweigh the shortcomings?
An increasing rate of high level crimes cause the fears for public security,urban areas attempt to take a large number of measures to improve the trend.
I'm in favor of the opinion that some high-tech skills applied in complexes are really producing an effective outcome,however,they also pose a negative influence in citizens' life.
For example,24-hour-observation from entrance guard can ensure the residents away from unnecessary disturb and stolen crimes,but it also make livers' privacy exposing over the eyes of the public.Security doors are using widely to protect people's properties and safety,with the relation of neighbors becoming tight and distant,which cause the community turns into a icy place.
In addition,scientific researches state that the efficient method to resolve these
issues is improving the awareness of citizens' security and taking proper actions in the first time,rather than depending on machines.Because tricky criminals can create various means to commit crime,the ability of human's flexible can make many efforts to fight with offenders.
From the above-mentioned discussion,we have concluded that defining a right social values and perform it obey the rules are very important .Changing mental thoughts can provides more benefits compare with building machinery system only.
@Fonda0908 @卖萌的触手 这篇觉得内容欠缺 你们看看还能补充点其他方面的points不?


来自iPhone客户端111楼2013-04-29 22:12
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    问题:A large number of measures to improve the security in urban areas have been introduced to solve the problem of increased crimes in society.Do the benefits of the measures outweigh the shortcomings?
    An increasing rate of high level crimes cause the fears for public security,urban areas attempt to take a large number of measures to improve the trend.
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    An increasing rate of criminal activities are causing the public fears for personal safety,urban communities attempt to take a large number of measures to improve the trend.


    114楼2013-04-30 11:06
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      I'm in favor of the opinion that some high-tech skills applied in complexes are really producing an effective outcome,however,they also pose a negative influence in citizens' life.
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      I'm in favor of the opinion that certain high-tech security measures applied in communities can produce positive outcomes,however,they can also create negative
      impacts in citizens' lives.


      115楼2013-04-30 11:15
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        For example,24-hour-observation from entrance guard can ensure the residents away from unnecessary disturb and stolen crimes,but it also make livers' privacy exposing over the eyes of the public.Security doors are using widely to protect people's properties and safety,with the relation of neighbors becoming tight and distant,which cause the community turns into a icy place.
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        For instance,24-hour-security at building entrances can ensure the residents to be kept away from unnecessary disturbances and theft. Security doors are used widely to protect people's properties and safety,because the relationship of neighbors has become distant in modern sociaty,which cause the community to be isolated.


        116楼2013-04-30 11:38
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          In addition,scientific researches state that the efficient method to resolve these
          issues is improving the awareness of citizens' security and taking proper actions in the first time,rather than depending on machines.Because tricky criminals can create various means to commit crime,the ability of human's flexible can make many efforts to fight with offenders.
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          In addition,scientific research has proven that the most efficient method to resolve these issues is by improving the citizens' safety awareness and taking proper security precautions,rather than totally depend on technologies. Because tricky criminals can create various means to commit crime,the ability of human's flexibility can make many efforts to fight off offenders.


          117楼2013-04-30 11:56
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            From the above-mentioned discussion,we have concluded that defining a right social values and perform it obey the rules are very important .Changing mental thoughts can provides more benefits compare with building machinery system only.
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            From the above-mentioned discussion,we have concluded that enforce positive social values and perform it within the rules are very important. Changing mental thoughts can provides more benefits than depending on building machinery system only.


            118楼2013-04-30 12:13
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              问题:We know that university graduates should earn higher salary than less well-educated members in society,so in this way they should pay all the full cost,such as the tuition fee.Do you agree?
              Comparing with the less well-educated groups,college graduates indeed have more opportunities to obtain good jobs and earn much money.On the basis of that situation,some people give a point of view that college graduates should burden all the expenses,such as the tuition fee.
              As for me,I'm in favor of the opinion that although paying for these issues by graduates indeed lightens government's pressure,thus money saved can be allocated to other public services,it also bring some negative impacts for undergraduates who are still living in campus.
              For students who do not have enough money to pay for the tuition,they are more likely to find part-time jobs to make money,that will reduce their study time and even cause an increasing dropping rate.Some undergraduates in poverty are talented and shoulder expects from families,if government do not provide assistance to pay the fees,these students may waste energies in unnecessary events and lost the opportunities to improve their abilities.
              In addition,personal security is still a big problem in modern society.Graduates who have no social experience tend to be cheated by tricky offenders and firms.The city witness hundreds of crimes committing in public and private places everyday.How to protect younger workers' benefits is becoming an important point to value a city's overall controlling force.
              From the above-mentioned discussion,we can make a concern that government should burden the responsibility to pay for the fees of universities,thus graduates can devote themselves to subject researches totally and give feedbacks to society after they graduated from universities.
              @fonda0908 @卖萌的触手 最近的作文完成的比较紧凑 麻烦你们啦


              来自iPhone客户端119楼2013-04-30 15:45
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                For example,24-hour-observation from entrance guard can ensure the residents away from unnecessary disturb and stolen crimes,but it also make livers' privacy exposing over the eyes of the public.Security doors are using widely to protect people's properties and safety,with the relation of neighbors becoming tight and distant,which cause the community turns into a icy place.
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                For instance,although 24-hour-security at building entrances can ensure the residents to be kept away from unnecessary disturbances and theft, however, security doors that are used widely to protect people's property and safety might cause the relationship of neighbors to become more distant and isolated.


                120楼2013-04-30 19:43
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                  问题:We know that university graduates should earn higher salary than less well-educated members in society,so in this way they should pay all the full cost,such as the tuition fee.Do you agree?
                  Comparing with the less well-educated groups,college graduates indeed have more opportunities to obtain good jobs and earn much money.On the basis of that situation,some people give a point of view that college graduates should burden all the expenses,such as the tuition fee.
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                  Compare with the less educated groups,college graduates indeed have more opportunities to obtain good jobs and earn more money. On the basis of that situation,some people have a point of view that college graduates should burden all the expenses,such as the tuition fee.


                  121楼2013-04-30 20:08
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                    As for me,I'm in favor of the opinion that although paying for these issues by graduates indeed lightens government's pressure,thus money saved can be allocated to other public services,it also bring some negative impacts for undergraduates who are still living in campus.
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                    As for me,I'm in favor of the opinion that although paying for these issues by college students indeed lightens government's pressure,thus money saved can be allocated to other public services,it also can bring negative impacts for undergraduates who are still living on campus.


                    122楼2013-04-30 20:10
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                      For students who do not have enough money to pay for the tuition,they are more likely to find part-time jobs to make money,that will reduce their study time and even cause an increasing dropping rate.Some undergraduates in poverty are talented and shoulder expects from families,if government do not provide assistance to pay the fees,these students may waste energies in unnecessary events and lost the opportunities to improve their abilities.
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                      For students who do not have enough money to pay for the tuition,they are more likely to find part-time jobs to make money, which will reduce their study time and even cause an increasing dropping rate. Some undergraduates in poverty are talented and have high expectations from theirfamilies. If the government do not provide assistance for the college expenses,these students may waste energies in unnecessary events and lose the opportunities to improve their study.


                      123楼2013-04-30 20:17
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                        In addition,personal security is still a big problem in modern society.Graduates who have no social experience tend to be cheated by tricky offenders and firms.The city witness hundreds of crimes committing in public and private places everyday.How to protect younger workers' benefits is becoming an important point to value a city's overall controlling force.
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                        In addition,personal welfare is still a big problem in modern society. Graduates who have no social experience tend to be taken advanged by tricky firms. The city witness hundreds of crimes committed in public and private places everyday.
                        How to protect young workers' benefits is becoming an important factor to value a city's overall management.
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                        This whole paragraph is out of the focus of this subject, are we still talking about whether the college students should be paying full expenses of schooling?


                        124楼2013-04-30 20:37
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