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来自iPad1楼2013-12-14 17:23回复
    In that crash(that car hit me)
    The car hit me
    Car hit me*3


    来自iPad2楼2013-12-14 17:24
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      。。。
      ~~啊!别踩我在小尾巴上啊,快松脚……好痛啊


      IP属地:河南来自Android客户端3楼2013-12-14 17:24
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        Every nights I see that boy
        Who in red with his toy
        Feels like a homeless puppy
        Waiting for a loving stranger
        Come pick it up and get it out of here


        来自iPad4楼2013-12-14 17:24
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          Oh that boy he has a ring
          I know the ring has a tedious story
          Maybe some Mr.right gave it to his mommy
          In a so-called ceremony , wedding


          来自iPad5楼2013-12-14 17:25
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            Mr.right named the boy Tobby
            Then left his wife and the newborn baby
            Little boy asked his mom where was his daddy
            That poor woman said he had gone to heaven


            来自iPad6楼2013-12-14 17:25
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              Lies are always endless
              Innocent boy thought he was happy
              Till he known the death of his mommy
              He cried a second time in his long long life


              来自iPad7楼2013-12-14 17:26
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                唱出来
                ~~啊!别踩我在小尾巴上啊,快松脚……好痛啊


                IP属地:河南来自Android客户端9楼2013-12-14 17:28
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                  掠过一段,开始第二段的。(不知副歌是什么不敢乱用?
                  I haven't meet that boy for fortnight
                  But I hear people talking about him day and night
                  "Don't you know that poor boy dead
                  In last Sunday night?"


                  来自iPad10楼2013-12-14 17:28
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                    For Just a while I was dizzy
                    And stopped though I know the road is busy
                    Then I see the driver of that car running to me
                    A Young boy who wearing red T-shirt


                    来自iPad11楼2013-12-14 17:29
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                      People screaming like HE IS BLEEDING
                      Anyway I don't want they talk bout my life
                      Guess what! I see the boy's toy
                      And his hand wearing a ring


                      来自iPad12楼2013-12-14 17:30
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                        Pls don't say in front of my body
                        Say that you never know me but now mourning
                        That little piece of shit Memory of me will gone
                        To the world you could never know


                        来自iPad13楼2013-12-14 17:30
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                          Hey Don't you tell me I've got a halo
                          Never do I want to be an angle
                          You'd better cut my wings to stop their tremble
                          Then Tobby let us go and get your father's dirty soul


                          来自iPad14楼2013-12-14 17:31
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                            接下来就是穿插的唱的部分
                            How'd you know?
                            These are all about the worst of the world.
                            How'd you know?
                            A happy-and-rich-all-the-time guy like you.
                            How'd you know?
                            Unless in that crash that car hit you.
                            How'd you know?
                            Unless that car hit you.


                            来自iPad15楼2013-12-14 17:31
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                              特地拆分一下便于找错,因为我自己写的错自己改不来,有好多地方肯定有超白痴的错,还请斧正。


                              来自iPad16楼2013-12-14 17:33
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