Our Winter Holiday
Every year, there is a winter holiday. It’s for us to have a good rest and do something we want to do.
Last winter holiday, I visited my grandparents in the Spring Festival and I did a volunteer work. That was a happy time .Every weekends, I went to the hospital and helped doctors to look after the patients. The most important work was to cheer them up. Most of them were upset and sad. It’s bad for curing. I read newspapers, stories for them. They also liked listening to the video. Sometimes I sang songs for them. When they were laughed happily, I felt blessedly too, because I can help others.
In this winter holiday, I will spend more time on my study. I’m going to have a important examination in June. It will decide our life in the future. So I have to study harder and harder to get to a good high school.
All in all, I hope all of us will have a happy holiday, and everyone can be looking up.
                                        X.Q.Xun

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My Winter Vacation
Every year, there is a winter holiday.（非英语好句，也无意义，或可改成：Every year, the winter vacation is the most popular topic among teenagers.） It’s for us to have a good rest and do something we really want to do.
Last winter holiday, I visited my grandparents in the Spring Festival and I did some volunteer work. That was a happy time .Every weekends, I went to the hospital and helped doctors to look after the patients. The most important work was to cheer them up. Most of them were upset and sad. It’s bad for curing. I read newspapers, stories for them. They also liked listening to the video. Sometimes I sang songs for them. When they   (were划掉)   laughed happily, I felt blessed too, because I can help others. （本段表达意思清晰，能够完成任务，但语言较为平淡，属于二类文甲等）
In this winter holiday, I will spend more time on my study. I’m going to have an important examination in June. It will decide our life in the future. （本句属于自己翻译的句子，It’s a big turning point in our life.）So I have to study harder and harder to get to a better high school.
All in all, I hope all of us will have a happy holiday, and everyone can be looking up.
                                         X.Q.Xun
点评：本篇作文标题应以My为主，而不是Our，基本能够完成题目要求的任务，详略得当，有少量语法错误，但简单句过多，使用的好词好句和复合句较少，从通篇的感觉上仍有以用母语去翻译的痕迹，因此定档为二档文章，分数为10分。


My Winter Holiday
Now,winter holiday is coming, I want to do something meaningful and have a holiday better than last year.
Last winter holiday,I did some volunteer work..Every morning,I went to a park which is near my house, First,I clean up the park bench with a dishrag. Then,I picked up the rubbish that was throwed by people.I was so proud that I didn’t feel tired,because I can do some thing for the environment.
Now,I know how important the high school entrance examination is,so I dicide concentrate more on my study. I think P.E.is my weak point,and this year ,playing basketball is a new item in the examination,so I’m going to play basketball everyday . I know playing basketball is difficult for girls,it needs power and endurance,but I will not give up,I want to do have a good behaved in the examination.
I think my winter holiday will be very happy and substantial . 
                           刘思辰

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My Winter Holiday
Now, winter holiday is coming, I want to do something meaningful and have a better holiday   than last year.
Last winter holiday,I did some volunteer work..Every morning,I went to a park which was near my house, First,I cleaned up the park benches. Then,I picked up the rubbish that was thrown by people.I was so proud that I didn’t feel tired,because I could do something helpful   for the environment.
Now,I know how important the high school entrance examination is,so I decided to   concentrate more on my study. I think P.E.is my weak point,and this year ,playing basketball is a new item in the examination,so I’m going to play basketball everyday . I know playing basketball is difficult for girls because it   needs power and endurance,but I will not give up,I want to behave well   in the examination.
I think my winter holiday will be very happy and substantial .  
                            刘思辰
刘思辰同学作文：能够完成作文题目要求，并使用部分好词，但是自己翻译的成分太多，并不是使用几个自己查到的形容词就代表作文中有好词好句，因此句型使用不当的情况比较严重，语法错误较多，个别句子出现时态混乱，只能归于三档文章，得分8分。


向假期里还在辛勤工作的老师致敬！！！

Our winter vacation
During the last vacation,I went shopping to buy clothes which I liked and went swimming which made me feel happy and excited .In addition,I also visited my grandpareats as usual what’s more? I was salways sleeping ten hours a day.
This vacation is one of the most vacations in my life Because I have to stady bard in oder that get good grades in the final exam . So I study very hard instead of playing.
I believe the more pains I give , the better grades back! I hope I will have a big prorgress in this vacation!
温丹阳

Our winter vacation
During the last vacation,I went shopping to buy clothes which I liked and went swimming which made me feel happy and excited .In addition,I also visited my grandparants as usual what’s more? I was always sleeping ten hours a day.
This vacation is one of the most vacations in my life Because I have to study bard in order that get good grades in the final exam . So I study very hard instead of playing.
I believe the more pains I have, the better grades back! I hope I will have a big progress in this vacation!
           温丹阳（正确）


My Winter Holiday
The yearly winter vacation is a time when students are most excited. Because we can have a good rest and then do something meaningful.
The last winter - that is, when I was a junior high school second grade student- I was very relaxed. I visited my friends’ house .I was really excited and relaxed. And I did volunteers every week. I went to my father’s company and did my best help them. Actually, I often slept more than 13 hours every day.
But now I am a third-year student. I need to study harder. So I am going to round between the library and home. Although I have not used all day to learn, I spend a lot longer time studying than last year.
All in all, the examination will be held in June next year. We should look forward and enjoy the winter vacation.
郭天一
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Winter Holiday
Time ran much faster than we thought.Now, we will have our next winter holiday.Did you make a plan for it?
My last holiday was really inspiring.I had a class to study new knowledge,and I did my best inhomework.After that ,I was go to AoMen with my parents.There was so charming that all of us fell in love with there. We enjoyed the view , felt the different culture and tasted the delicious food. I had a unforgettable holiday.
As for this holiday, I will study harder. First, I plan to have more time to review and prepare lessons. I will do as best as I can in classes like every holidays.Second, I need pay more attention to homework. Because they are important to us. Then, I am going to volunteer in my mother’s company.It’s education at all. Next, I must relax too.I am going to go shopping in free time.I believe I will have a substantial holiday.
This is my holiday plan. How about yours?
FROM. XYao


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Our winter vacation
During the last vacation,I went shopping to buy clothes which I liked and went swimming which made me feel happy and excited .In addition,I also visited my grandparants as usual what’s more，I was always sleeping ten hours a day.
This vacation is one of the most vacations in my life（most 什么？） Because I have to study bard in order to get good grades in the final exam . So I study very hard instead of playing.
I believe the more pain I have, the better grades I’ll get! I hope I will have big progress in this vacation!
            温丹阳（正确）
点评：本篇作文能够完成写作要求，但语言较为平淡，内容不够丰富，语法错误不多，属于二档文章，得分9分。


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My Winter Holiday
The yearly winter vacation is a time when students are most excited. Because we can have a good rest and then do something meaningful. （开头简洁准确，很好）
Last winter - that is, when I was a junior high school second grade student- I was very relaxed. I visited my friends’ house .I was really excited and relaxed. And I did volunteer work every week. I went to my father’s company and did my best to help them. Actually, I often slept more than 13 hours every day.
But now I am a third-year student. I need to study harder. So I am going to round between the library and home. Although I have not used all day to learn, I spend a lot longer time studying than last year.
All in all, the examination will be held in June next year. We should look forward and enjoy the winter vacation.
郭天一
点评：本篇文章能够完成作文要求，语言丰富，叙述流畅，能看出作者有一定的语言功底，有个别语法错误，但不影响文章整体理解，如果能使内容更丰富向上一些，会有更好的效果，属于二档文，得分12分。


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My Winter Holiday
      I had a nice winter holiday this year. （时态混乱，今年的寒假还没有度过啊）During last holiday, I had a great time.
     I played ping-pong ball and did my holiday homework everyday. I visited Beijing Zoo and saw lots of animals at there. I am going to spend more time in studying. And I will study harder than before.
     The most meaning thing is that I went to my hometown. It had a lot of changes .And I enjoy myself there.
     What a nice winter holiday !
              
                         石瀚男
点评：没有完成作文要求，缺少对今年寒假的计划，属于缺项，语法错误太多，时态混乱，语言贫乏，作者明显没有用心写，属于三档文章，得分6分。


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Winter Holiday
Time ran much faster than we thought.Now, we will have our next winter holiday.Did you make a plan for it?
My last holiday was really inspiring.I had a class to study new knowledge,and I did my best in homework.After that ,I went to Macau with my parents.It was so charming that all of us fell in love with there. We enjoyed the view , felt the different culture and tasted the delicious food. I had an unforgettable holiday.
As for this holiday, I will study harder. First, I plan to have more time to review and prepare lessons. I will do as best as I can in classes like every holidays.Second, I need pay more attention to homework. Because they are important to us. Then, I am going to volunteer in my mother’s company.It’s educational. Next, I must get relaxed too.I am going to go shopping in free time.I believe I will have a substantial holiday.
This is my holiday plan. How about yours?
FROM. Xyao
点评：本篇文章能够完成作文要求，作者叙述流畅，有逻辑顺序，句型较为丰富，能够较为熟练驾驭语言，有少量语法错误，不影响全文，属于一档文，得分13分。


抱歉啊，来晚了
My winter holiday
After a long term , We finally wait until the holidays.Although we very tired before the holidays, but still can not relax this holiday season. The next term, we will have examination, which may determine our future. So we have to be taken seriously.
In this holiday season, I prepared a lot for their own learning time. Including outside school. In fact, the first two weeks really tired, I thought of giving up. But the thought of a lot of students are working hard to improve themselves, so I also working hard. I hope that after the holiday, I can have a good state to meet the test.
Hope that my flies very meaningful this holiday season and also hope that no one student can be harvested, rather than wasting those hours.
This is my holiday, though busy, but it makes sense.