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一般不严。
题目是外卖
Nowadays, takeout have been a part of our livesmore and more people call for a takeout. ltcan be seen as a double edged sword.
Takeout do bring a lot of convenience to our lives.we save a lot of time in cooking whichmeans we have much time to do others things we like to after work.But there is also a lot of confusion in the food delivery industry. For example, the food is notclean and unhealthy, Packaging materials pollute the environment.Besides, Manv businessesare unlicensed.
Last but not least, When we order takeout, we should pay attention to choose safe, hygienicand licensed businesses and be careful not to give out information about yourself. Try not tochoose cutlery, We all have the duty to protect the environment.


IP属地:蒙古1楼2023-04-15 11:45回复
    语法问题太多,takeout怎么也是单数,中式英语堆砌。。表意不清问题很严重。
    我改的话,12-15吧。。


    IP属地:浙江来自Android客户端5楼2023-04-17 09:15
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      Ordering take-out food online has been one of components of our lifestyles ,with more and more people enjoying the way to buy stuff ,it has been increasingly seeing as a double edged sword .


      IP属地:辽宁来自Android客户端6楼2023-04-17 12:41
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        have -> has
        a essential part 突出文章中心
        more and more -> people are become depending on ordering delivery over time.
        While some people think it brings convenience for us,i believe it is more likely to exert negative impacts. 双刃剑这个表达也少用
        Firstly 连接词
        后面行文比较词穷,中心意思不明确
        confusion ->mess
        dirty->contaminated
        packaging materials ->plastic
        divulge your privacy
        怎么就能要保护环境了?????????


        IP属地:江苏来自Android客户端7楼2023-04-17 16:30
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          cooking后面要逗号
          other things
          food delivery industry和干不干净没有很大的关系,我觉得你可能想说的是有些开展了外卖的店铺卫生条件不好。
          not clean and unhealthy这里改成unclean或者healthy
          not to give out information about yourself可以改成not to leak your information或者protect your information from leakage


          IP属地:江苏来自iPhone客户端8楼2023-04-18 12:11
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