新作文写好了,不过有几点要提前跟老师们沟通下,由于雅思作文考察的要求是:无明显语法和拼写错误,尽量多用长难句,少用简单句式,注意定语和宾语从句的使用等。所以有的时候明明知道这样的表述很拖沓很重复,我也不得不这样写。由于我的英语底子不怎么厚,也没有留学经验,所以不可能把大家改写的新型句式都背下来。所以希望大家能勉为其难,在我原有的句子上做特定的修改,看是否有语法错误,有没有有更加精妙的表达方式,尽量不要彻底重写。(虽然我知道也许那样会更方便些)
这样时间久了,我就能形成一套自己的写作模板,并根据考题需要代入内容了,特此拜谢
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题目:the government
should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to
decrease the violence crimes in modern society.To what extent do you agree or
disagree?
In modern society, an increasing number of violent crimes has become a serious problem that government should address in advance. Some people
argue that the amount of violence in films and on TV should be control by departments in charge. In my view, government should find another workable method to resolve it.
To be honest ,violent pictures and videos exert a negative impact on people ,especially teenagers.The youth who suffering from troubles are
more likely to solve it depends violence and follow the example of actors in action movie .But the limit of the films and television will cause a serious trouble that you never mind.
Films and television are the main form in mess media to show
the situation of society. It can guarantee citizens benefit the freedom of speech and supervise local authorities, corruption and emergencies can be tackled effective, common people also have a platform to air their opinions, which help government to carry out proper policy and make efforts.
What is more, violence on mass media is not the only reason leading to violent crimes. It is generally agreed that divorce rate rocketing
is the main point in modern society. Parental education pose a important factor during people’s children time , if they can not receive enough care and advices from family , the youth are tend to become selfish and bad-tempered.Satistics show that one-third of youth offender are victims from broken families .
From the above-mentioned discussion, schools and government should take a series of efficient measures to address problem for certain areas.